5 Replies to “The Train of Tomorrow (Ezra Keough)”
I really enjoyed this slidecast and thought you chose a very relevant topic. I thought that your selection of historical images was excellent, with a solid combination of relevance, information and aesthetic appeal. However, some of the modern pictures seemed to be more generic and less related to your exact topic. The slides with multiple images could also be resized to be more symmetrical. I also thought that you spoke with an excellent pace that made it easy for listeners to understand you. There was also a solid flow to this presentation, as it seemed like most of your slides tied in closely with the previous slide. The biggest change I would make in a subsequent slidecast would be to include more discussion of class topics. An early reference to some of the discussions we have had in class would help improve the listeners understanding of future projections. Other than that I thought that this was an excellent slidecast and that you did a great job!
Hey Ezra, your presentation on the trains of the future was very educational. I really liked how you connected the design elements of futuristic train concepts to the societal problems of their time period. One aspect of the presentation that I think you could improve upon is trying to organize the slides in chronological order. I liked the slides on the modern rail system but I think the presentation would be more fluid if they were placed at the end of the presentation. I also liked that you did not just focus on the train itself but also the systems that train travel depends upon. Also, something both you and I could work on would be providing a better connection to historical context. This only applies to a couple of your slides, the majority did a good job of applying context to innovation. I would also check your video editing software as the transitions between images are choppy. I have no idea what could cause that.
Hi Ezra, nice work on your slidecast! It was very informative and I really learned a lot about how the concepts of trains have progressed from the 1960s to now. I really liked how you had examples from multiple eras and were able to a show a continuous flow of the evolution of the train. One thing I might focus on next time is providing a little more context into how these futuristic train depictions came about. You briefly mentioned how the increases in traffic in urban environments lead to trains that would travel over top of the cars. If you include more principles such as this that lead to the futuristic designs you talk about in your slidecast, I think it would be easier to get a feel for your topic. Another thing, it may have just been my computer, but the transitions between pictures were not very smooth and sometimes would take a couple seconds to fully load. Overall though I think you did a really good job and really showed enthusiasm about the topic.
I really enjoyed your slide cast; as a whole, it achieves its goal of providing context based on ideas of the future. You do a great job of providing the context for the development U.S. rail systems, however it might be interesting if you then give some context on the development of soviet rail systems as well. This would be an interesting precursor to contrasting U.S./Soviet views of the future of rails. I would also use this contrast to highlight societal anxieties and tensions with regards to the Soviets during the cold war. Tying this back to your original assumptions might also add some interesting discussion to your presentation Additionally, I would pay a little more attention to the chronology of your slides; maybe structure them a little more to follow a timeline and then discuss how class themes fit in at the end. This might help the slide cast flow a little better and make the project as a whole a bit more cohesive.
I really enjoyed your slidecast. I thought it did a great job at telling a story of the history of trains, stemming from the 1920’s and moving forward. For an assignment like this, I really do believe its important to tell a full story, starting with background information/historical context, then developing a sense for the demand for the technology. Ending with the current status of the trains was also a great touch, and was something that I employed as well in my own slidecast. There were a few technical problems that I had while watching, mainly the transitions. At times the audio did not seem to line up with the pictures, which may have come from exporting the ppt file as an iMovie. Also, watch the length of the video (should be closer to 6:40 if following penta kucha formatting).
I really enjoyed this slidecast and thought you chose a very relevant topic. I thought that your selection of historical images was excellent, with a solid combination of relevance, information and aesthetic appeal. However, some of the modern pictures seemed to be more generic and less related to your exact topic. The slides with multiple images could also be resized to be more symmetrical. I also thought that you spoke with an excellent pace that made it easy for listeners to understand you. There was also a solid flow to this presentation, as it seemed like most of your slides tied in closely with the previous slide. The biggest change I would make in a subsequent slidecast would be to include more discussion of class topics. An early reference to some of the discussions we have had in class would help improve the listeners understanding of future projections. Other than that I thought that this was an excellent slidecast and that you did a great job!
Hey Ezra, your presentation on the trains of the future was very educational. I really liked how you connected the design elements of futuristic train concepts to the societal problems of their time period. One aspect of the presentation that I think you could improve upon is trying to organize the slides in chronological order. I liked the slides on the modern rail system but I think the presentation would be more fluid if they were placed at the end of the presentation. I also liked that you did not just focus on the train itself but also the systems that train travel depends upon. Also, something both you and I could work on would be providing a better connection to historical context. This only applies to a couple of your slides, the majority did a good job of applying context to innovation. I would also check your video editing software as the transitions between images are choppy. I have no idea what could cause that.
Hi Ezra, nice work on your slidecast! It was very informative and I really learned a lot about how the concepts of trains have progressed from the 1960s to now. I really liked how you had examples from multiple eras and were able to a show a continuous flow of the evolution of the train. One thing I might focus on next time is providing a little more context into how these futuristic train depictions came about. You briefly mentioned how the increases in traffic in urban environments lead to trains that would travel over top of the cars. If you include more principles such as this that lead to the futuristic designs you talk about in your slidecast, I think it would be easier to get a feel for your topic. Another thing, it may have just been my computer, but the transitions between pictures were not very smooth and sometimes would take a couple seconds to fully load. Overall though I think you did a really good job and really showed enthusiasm about the topic.
I really enjoyed your slide cast; as a whole, it achieves its goal of providing context based on ideas of the future. You do a great job of providing the context for the development U.S. rail systems, however it might be interesting if you then give some context on the development of soviet rail systems as well. This would be an interesting precursor to contrasting U.S./Soviet views of the future of rails. I would also use this contrast to highlight societal anxieties and tensions with regards to the Soviets during the cold war. Tying this back to your original assumptions might also add some interesting discussion to your presentation Additionally, I would pay a little more attention to the chronology of your slides; maybe structure them a little more to follow a timeline and then discuss how class themes fit in at the end. This might help the slide cast flow a little better and make the project as a whole a bit more cohesive.
Hey Ezra,
I really enjoyed your slidecast. I thought it did a great job at telling a story of the history of trains, stemming from the 1920’s and moving forward. For an assignment like this, I really do believe its important to tell a full story, starting with background information/historical context, then developing a sense for the demand for the technology. Ending with the current status of the trains was also a great touch, and was something that I employed as well in my own slidecast. There were a few technical problems that I had while watching, mainly the transitions. At times the audio did not seem to line up with the pictures, which may have come from exporting the ppt file as an iMovie. Also, watch the length of the video (should be closer to 6:40 if following penta kucha formatting).