Hey everyone, this is the updated version of my Pilot episode. As point of reference I have attached my current Proposal here. There is also a personal write-up that I made to articulate the What and Why Behind Life
I have also put the Character Trajectories in this post so you can get an idea of what will happen to each of the main characters. Each bullet point is essentially something that will happen within one of the first 5 episodes.
As for changes to the script: I have adjusted the dialogue in the scenes and tried to make it more developed and realistic. I also took the suggestions for how to show movement and the ways that people say things with brackets
Looking forward to your feedback!! Hope this information is helpful rather than too much to go off of