Hey guys, here is the latest version of my doc. I definitely need some feedback so if you have time, please let me know what you think! Also, the current graphic to explain the structure is just a filler and is going to be replaced.
I’m specifically looking for two kinds of feedback (so I’d prefer if you pick one of these to think about instead of trying to do both at the same time):
- Overall clarity and story:
- where are you confused?
- what part feel redundant/over-explained?
- is there a missing shot or visual that would help?
- any issues with the order of clips?
2. Color correction: I’ve started color correction but haven’t gotten very far. I’ve been looking at this too much so an objective set of eyes would be nice.
- what clips bother you the most? (please give me times)
- if a clip bothers you, can you explain what you don’t like about it? (exposure, color, etc.)
1.) I really love the intro, but I think the first woman who speaks is still a little jarring, and taking her out would make the issue at hand somewhat ambiguous until we see the title and realize all of these people are talking about hunger – just thinking that maybe a ‘slow reveal’ of the topic/issue would work.
2.) Clarity: I was unsure of the connection between food waste & the word “clean” during the stop motion. The discussion of the pantries & “nutrition education” was really clear.
3.) Your conclusion really wrapped everything up well, I liked the last quote – just maybe bump up the audio on her at the end because I lose the last part of her sentence.