I noticed that the opening shot was too blurry and shaking for too long, but once it focused it was disturbing to see what was happening to the building that was shot. The strongest parts of this video are the ones that include what is happening to the environment. The shots of the broken down buildings, the construction sights, the polluted are what stuck out to me the most. I felt like I could identify some part of the story they were trying to tell, but it wasn’t clear. I was confused about the inclusion of children and how that is and was involved in the story they were or are trying to tell. I understand blurring the shots with the children because they did not sign release forms to be filmed, but I also feel like the quality of the image took away from the message the B-Roll was trying to portray. Going forward, I think this group needs to clarify and think about the role the children are going to have in this film and to identify it clearly. I would also suggest focusing more on what is happening environmentally and show those clips, because that was most meaningful to me. I am excited to see where this documentary short will lead you.
